-- "Sanctuary - Part Two"
Outline dated 3/29/94
Page 2: Another funeral for another person who isn't really dead? Please
could you just show the X-Man talking informally about Magneto over coffee
or something, not have another death ceremony in the garden.
Also on this page, it will not be acceptable to show or imply that Gambit
is being tortured. Please remove the electrodes. He may be imprisoned,
and Cortez could threaten never to release him, or some such. Let's discuss
alternatives. (Again, his name should not be "Cortez.")
Page 3: As noted above, delete "more voltage."
Page 4: Please do not have Xavier state overtly that there's "a good
chance some of them won't be returning from this mission." We would
prefer emphasis on the importance of the battle, not its potential for
Page 5: It will not be acceptable to destroy a landmark such as the Eiffel
Tower. Perhaps Cortez could blow up a mountain, or some such. Also on
this page, Gambit should not be bruised or appear to have been beaten.
Page 8: Please do not have Gambit grab Cortez by the face or neck.
Page 10: It will not be acceptable to imply that Magneto injures or kills
Cortez here. Please devise a way to show Cortez escaping.
Page 11: Please delete or substitute for the phrase "reborn to serve
a new lord."
FROM: ERIC LEWALD
RE: "X-MEN" - OUTLINES
DATE: MONDAY, APRIL 4, 1994
Here are some reactions to your notes an the two outlines. Let me know
if I'm too far off base here. Otherwise, you might just wait to see how
the scripts play out.
"Sanctuary - Part Two" (#300-49)
p. 2 - Yes. No "ceremony" in necessary here -- simply an informal
gathering where some of the X-Men say how they are feeling.
p. 2 - I knew this would be tough. Yes, let's please discuss alternatives.
Just saying, "I'll never let you go," isn't very dramatic. I
also understand that we can't show torture. Is there a middle ground?
Can we show Gambit a little roughed up (torn uniform, a bruise or two)?
Can Cortez threaten to soon toss him off into space? How can we show this
brash bad guy to be bad?
p. 3 - Fine.
p. 4 - How about a mixture: First, the mission is crucial to the future
of the planet; and, second, it could be fatal.
p. 5 - A mountain in okay, though we'll think about it a bit. Also I think
we should find a new landmark besides the Eiffel Tower. But I still do
not understand what makes damaging landmarks worse than damaging unknown
buildings or mountains. Surely no Frenchman would Complain.
BRUISES: Again, how else can we imply Cortez's evil acts against Gambit?
p. 8 - Fine.
p. 10 - Please consider the imminent ending -- where Cortez is saved by
Apocalypse -- as being an answer. This bad guy has just endangered the
entire planet, tried to kill countless people in the Asteroid and on the
ground, and has destroyed Magneto's dream. I feel strongly that the audience
will be anxious to see that he get a severe comeuppance, that his serious
crimes be punished seriously. If he bails out and is fine, it will seem
unjust. As it is, being saved by Apocalypse is no picnic.
p. 11 - Fine. How about "new master?"
-- "Sanctuary - Part Two"
Script dated 5/27/94
Page 14: Please do not identify the location of the attack as Nevada,
nor the dam as Hoover Dam.
Page 21: Please show that Chrome is only trapped behind the heavy equipment,
not crushed under it.
Page 23: Please substitute something more like "followers" for
Cortez' reference to Magneto's "loving disciples."
Page 25: Please ask the producers to send me a model for Unuscione, including
what she looks like with her "exo-skeleton projected. And what does
Wolverine mean, "she'd be a handful on date"?
Page 31: Please delete (or substitute "Magneto") for the underlined
in Cortez' "Have mercy, Lord."
Page 33: We should see that everyone has escaped safely before the asteroid